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Bridge 2009 (Slightly Revised)

On my bridge again
I see my city through opium eyes
Through the fog
Through silent tears
Where have you gone
Once a lover promising warm embrace
And unknown pleasures
But while on the nod you slipped away
Never to return
Only to be replaced by a surly
knife wieldng old whore
I once was king
Now a ghost
Banished to wander these lonely hills
Remembering nights gone by
And youth misspent
But now the hour is near
And you my beloved bridge
Once the golden gate to heaven
Once the road home
Now merely a means to an end
Just one step
Then oblivion
But first...
One last fix

Bridge 2009 (Slightly Revised)

On my bridge again
I see my city through opium eyes
Through the fog
Through silent tears
Where have you gone
Once a lover promising warm embrace
And unknown pleasures
But while on the nod you slipped away
Never to return
Only to be replaced by a surly
knife wieldng old whore
I once was king
Now a ghost
Banished to wander these lonely hills
Remembering nights gone by
And youth misspent
But now the hour is near
And you my beloved bridge
Once the golden gate to heaven
Once the road home
Now merely a means to an end
Just one step
Then oblivion
But first...
One last fix

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Can't believe this slipped me the first time. Or maybe that's the way things go. Sometimes I read a poem one time and miss the point. Next time I re-read it and it seems loud and clear, almost screaming at me. Might be a mood thing, maybe.

Well this is very good, very very good. You sort of threw me off with these two lines:
"Only to be replaced by a surly
knife wieldng old whore"

I can't say why, just didn't fit I think. But you recovered well enough. Liked this part best:
"And you my beloved bridge
Once the golden gate to heaven
Once the road home
Now merely a means to an end"

Good job!

Can't believe this slipped me the first time. Or maybe that's the way things go. Sometimes I read a poem one time and miss the point. Next time I re-read it and it seems loud and clear, almost screaming at me. Might be a mood thing, maybe.

Well this is very good, very very good. You sort of threw me off with these two lines:
"Only to be replaced by a surly
knife wieldng old whore"

I can't say why, just didn't fit I think. But you recovered well enough. Liked this part best:
"And you my beloved bridge
Once the golden gate to heaven
Once the road home
Now merely a means to an end"

Good job!

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Yes Kirk the"surly knife weilding old whore" analogy was inspired by a "surly knife weilding old whore" on Mission street at 4am one blurry morning.For some reason I thought it kinda summed up what San Francisco had become for me...kinda hostile, estranged, predatory. I`m glad that someone liked the "poem".

Yes Kirk the"surly knife weilding old whore" analogy was inspired by a "surly knife weilding old whore" on Mission street at 4am one blurry morning.For some reason I thought it kinda summed up what San Francisco had become for me...kinda hostile, estranged, predatory. I`m glad that someone liked the "poem".

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Ah, the great San Fran bridge! New York has her share of bridges too and some though nice picture attractions most times, do become "merely a means to an end".

Lol @ your 'knife wielding whore' analogy fair enough then! So when in San Fran just stay of Mission Street right? And give your work credit it was very good.

Ah, the great San Fran bridge! New York has her share of bridges too and some though nice picture attractions most times, do become "merely a means to an end".

Lol @ your 'knife wielding whore' analogy fair enough then! So when in San Fran just stay of Mission Street right? And give your work credit it was very good.

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